I wanted some feedback

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.Eric . Avatar

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Too long, plus you mention you like nice asses and nice booties in the same sentence

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How about that what you would cut out ?

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.Eric . Avatar

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It’s not just taking it out, it also needs to be re-worded
I wouldn’t put back in the entire core value section
Or reading good books or your life mission is to flow into greatness. It looks like you’re trying to make a more sexual profile, I would personally leave out god first, no offense
You said “ expert cuddles” it needs to be “expert cuddler”
Your weakness section I would cut out nice bodies
That’s implied with the nice ass line
And the nice energy I would leave out as well

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