Hi All, Just wanted to get some feedback on mu bio write up please. I tried to use a mix of DHV, humour, Attractive Passions and Sexual but not sure if it has all of those elements coming through. 6’0 | Web Designer Good Kisser, especially around the neck area World Traveller of 5 Countries Love Dogs I wear a colonge called Sex Panther Football Ambitious Passionate about Web Design Gym & Fitness Certified Cuddler Once walked 10miles home on a night out Lover of Italian & Mexican Food Clean Drivers Licence My Weaknesses: Very feminie women, Girls perfume, great asses, tight gym bodies, long sweet smelling hair Might seem like to much, but I just wanted to see what sticks, and what should be cut or edited. Also I wanted to have a go at writing something based off the bio video and article that Alex has put out there for us all to learn from and understand what makes those bio examples so good, rather than be lazy and just rip it off. I wanted to use the concepts I picked up from his bio examples and apply them to me and my lifestyle so that they sound congruent with who I am. I know I have clearly "stole" some lines from Alex's bio examples but even with those I have tried to put my own twist on them. Would love to get some feedback on it.

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Hey Alex, appreciate the feedback dude.

How about this v2

6’0 | Web Designer

Good Kisser or Great Oral skills
World Traveller of 5 Countries
Love Dogs
I wear a colonge called Sex Panther
Certified Cuddler
Once walked 10 miles home on a night out
Lover of Italian & Mexican Food
Clean Drivers Licence

My Weaknesses:
Feminine girls, nice booties, & a good sense of humor

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It's better man. Still a bit long-winded but moving in the right direction.

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Ok thanks man, how would you suggest to improve it further so it can be at it's best based on the current content?

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