Hi All, Just wanted to get some feedback on mu bio write up please. I tried to use a mix of DHV, humour, Attractive Passions and Sexual but not sure if it has all of those elements coming through. 6’0 | Web Designer Good Kisser, especially around the neck area World Traveller of 5 Countries Love Dogs I wear a colonge called Sex Panther Football Ambitious Passionate about Web Design Gym & Fitness Certified Cuddler Once walked 10miles home on a night out Lover of Italian & Mexican Food Clean Drivers Licence My Weaknesses: Very feminie women, Girls perfume, great asses, tight gym bodies, long sweet smelling hair Might seem like to much, but I just wanted to see what sticks, and what should be cut or edited. Also I wanted to have a go at writing something based off the bio video and article that Alex has put out there for us all to learn from and understand what makes those bio examples so good, rather than be lazy and just rip it off. I wanted to use the concepts I picked up from his bio examples and apply them to me and my lifestyle so that they sound congruent with who I am. I know I have clearly "stole" some lines from Alex's bio examples but even with those I have tried to put my own twist on them. Would love to get some feedback on it.

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Ok thanks man, how would you suggest to improve it further so it can be at it's best based on the current content?

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Join the mastermind and we'll take a crack at it.

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Ok cool, is there an option to join the MM only though, without paying for the book as well? So just to sign up for $39 p/m

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