Profile text feedback and question re less is more

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Jicka null Avatar

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Yo,

just wanted to check no big red flags in my bio, like bumble for those prompts lets you create a nice fantasy. Had some birds qualify themselves over shit I've written so assume its ok.

Last week I was out and I sarged up these young german girls, 18-22. Mostly just having fun and my new fav thing to do is to go over their tinder profiles and talk shit about online dating and the dynamics of it, also pick their brains a bit.

Anyway the bouncer was eavesdropping and while initially adversarial he warmed to me fast and was qualifying, he was the first to show his profile, then them and lastly me. I intentionally didn't offer and made them ask hehe.

I made a comment to them that hot girls are lazy and don't write anything. The little hottie I liked said a comment that for both me and the bouncer dude too much writing. I was like interesting, tell me why, is it too tryhard? She said yes, exactly, too much text makes it seem like a guy is trying too hard.

Got me thinking, my theory is 30+ girls want more investment, young honeys just looking for fun might respond more to the low investment fuckboi type who doesnt bother writing as much / seems mysterious or signals abundance. Any thoughts on that?

If so, I was looking through my canned lines and thought of something along these lines - let me know if any stand out as good and dominant or just silly

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In the twilight is the best time for lies.

Just swipe right and I'll do the rest.

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all we need is an understanding, all you need is a man

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I would slap you if I didn't think it would lead to a kiss

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Their is a nice middle ground where you're displaying some of your personality but you're not being too long winded. Right now, your profile is definitely too long-winded and random. It could be condensed into half of it's current length. Check out the "How to write your Tinder bio" section of the product for example. And look at my current bio. You can see how it's short but sweet, that's what you want. Your first line is also really random and doesn't add any value, so I would just completely take that out.

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Jicka null Avatar

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middle ground makes sense

how do you feel about something like this?

“Everything is created twice, first in the mind and then in reality.”

Allow me to tell you about our date.

I'll steer the ship but I need a sassy swashbuckling first mate that looks good in a summer dress.

We'll keep it light and fun at first. If there's chemistry, take it from there.

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avilench . Avatar

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Lol no man. I'm definitely not a fan of that. It's too random & sounds slightly weird. I highly recommend re-reading the bio chapter of the product. Basically, you want your bio to add value to your profile. The bio you proposed doesn't add any value. What does it tell the girl about you? What DHV does it have? Definitely check out the chapter and also check out the video I have on "How to write the best Tinder bio" I think after going through that, this will make more sense. Hope that helps man.

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