So I got some updated pics, need to pick through them first but also worked on my bio again after watching Swift's most-recent bio vid. Feedback would be epic.
183cm | Cape Town | Traveling Entrepreneur and Consultant
- Great beard genes
- Kickboxer
- 10+ countries visited
- Dogs
- Expert cuddler
- No felonies
- Learning German
- Once locked eyes with Ryan Reynolds and Denzel Washington
WEAKNESSES: Nice booties, tall, non-American accents, and easy to smile
16 Posts (+66), 242 Cmts (+331)
Good! Are you in kickboxing competitions?
G
4 Posts (+5), 21 Cmts (+8)
Not consistently but I have competed i.e. there is a winner and a loser. You're thinking "Competitive Kickboxer" vs. "Kickboxer" right?
7 Posts (+1), 95 Cmts (+8)
Where is the sexual undertone, Oral Skills and Dominant? That's the most important thing about the bio
G
4 Posts (+5), 21 Cmts (+8)
Ah! Forgot about "Dominant". "Great Oral Skills" fits with my work as well
393 Posts (+1.3K), 15K Cmts (+5.3K)
Youre on the right track, but some of your wording needs to be switched up
Great beard genes should be either great genes or worlds best beard.
Kickboxer should be kickboxing or "MMA"
10+ countries visisted should be world traveler of 20+ countries
For the last line write "Once locked eyes with Ryan Reynolds"
For weaknesses just say nice booties, accents, and cute smiles (saying tall will you screen you out a bunch of girls that you would probably still bang)
4 Posts (+5), 21 Cmts (+8)
Appreciate the feedback everyone! Already seeing a change in the "vibe" of my interactions after my first changes.
V2
183cm | Cape Town | Traveling Entrepreneur and Consultant
WEAKNESSES: Nice booties, accents, and cute smiles
Saying "great" twice feels a bit off to me, but "Great oral skills" I think works nicely considering the work I do i.e. I do have to give presentations and speak to teams so it's ambiguous
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Nice man, glad to hear